Considerate Teacher
We meet a lot of teachers in our life. Some are good and some are bad. The most influential teacher in my life was history teacher when I was in high school. He was my homeroom teacher. First of all, he was so enthusiastic about teaching history that he always prepared something for the class which helped us understand his lecture. For example, he brought the map of ancient Korea. It allowed us to understand what happened at that time and which country rose and fell. And most classes in our high school was boring, but his class didn't let us fall asleep. Second, he always encouraged our class students to study hard. When someone got low grade, he didn't got angry. He often said that we could do better next time. So after every exam, we didn't get stressed and discouraged. So we could study harder for the next exam and got a good grade. Third, he cared about us much. Usually, teachers are occupied at their own things. So they don't think of their students. However, my homeroom teacher was different. When someone had a hard time in something, he was a good listener. Also he advised to get over. We felt comfortable with him. I'm glad that he was my homeroom teacher, and I will never forget him.
Your writing is well organized. It surly pinned down from the general sentence into specific examples. But it would have been better if you included a direct quotation and describe a certain situation you had with your teacher. Also there are some grammatical mistakes such as "most classes was boring" and "he didn't got angry." Overall, it is a good piece of writing.
ReplyDeleteHi.I'm Oh You Jeong
ReplyDeleteYour writing has good examples of your teacher. You described well and your examples are very specific. I could see why you thought your history teacher was an excellent person. However, you are missing quotations that would make your writing much better. Also, there are small grammatical errors. Other than that, I really enjoyed reading your writing!