Da-hyun Yang
I will introduce the place of my cousin's dog, lango. The size of his house is very much similar to the toilet bowl. It has a blue roof, and its shape of the top is not sharp but curved. And the color of its body which is under the roof is a bright grey. The roof has horizontal dark-blue stripes and the body has vertical dark-grey stripes. Therefore the stripes of these two are perpendicular to each other. This house is made of plastic, so when I knocked the side of the house, the pounding sound resounded through the lango's house. Inside the house, there is a red cushion. Even though my cousin washed it regularly, it has unforgettable smell of urine. To know the atmosphere inside his house, I put my head inside. It was very tiny, of course, but being surrounded by the scent of lango's shampoo and air freshener, his house gives off a feeling of coziness.
Hi, this is Jean Park. What I liked about your writing is that you tried to describe every senses from Lango's house. I could definitely see what lango's house look like, what sounds I can hear and also the smell. The improvements could be, at the first sentence, I think it's better to say introdue lango's house. Also it would be nice if you change some words.
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I will introduce the house of my cousin's brown dachshund dog whose name is Lango. The size of his house is very much similar to the toilet bowl. It has a blue roof, and its shape of the top is not sharp but curved. And the color of its body which is under the roof is a bright grey. The roof has horizontal dark-blue stripes and the body has vertical dark-grey stripes. Therefore the stripes of these two are perpendicular to each other. This house is made of plastic, so when I knocked the side of the house, the pounding sound resounded through the Lango's house. Inside the house, there is a red cushion. Even though my cousin washed it regularly, it has unforgettable smell of urine. To know the atmosphere inside his house, I put my head inside. It was very tiny, of course, but being surrounded by the scent of Lango's shampoo and air freshener, his house gives off a feeling of coziness.