Over 15 years, I had lived in one place. I loved my house, even if it's small, our family lived together. In that house, there are three rooms, one bathroom, and dining room linked kitchen. For me, the best place was my room, of course. What I look through the window is a street and a church, also I can see beautiful sunset because my room faces west. My room was small but there are much furniture and small ornaments. There is a bed, a desk, and a piano, also there are three bookshelves. I decorated my room like a real girl place. The bed is rose-colored and the sheet is pink-colored. On the bed, there are some dolls and soft cushions being edged with white lace. Other furniture is made of hardwood, so it looks like a room for little princess. Of course, even the wallpaper was pink-colored and brightened. This was my first room, and I spend half of my life in this place. So I can remind it whenever I want. If I can return before I move, I want to see my lovely place again.
Hi, this is Jean Park. Your writing is really wonderful! I could just imagine your room, how lovely it was and I could feel how much you liked your room. I think you described well in visual things like furnitures in your room. Although this week's assignment was to describe five senses but I couldn't read any other senses except visual things. If you improve this part I think it would become a better written writing.
ReplyDeleteHi. your writing is so impressive! I could understand why your room was the special place to you. Your description is well written to help me to vividly imagine the place. However, there is only sense of sight. If you add some more details with different kinds of senses, the writing would be more interesting. Also try to explain us where the furnitures are exactly located in the room. Overall, it was great to read your writing.
ReplyDeleteHello this is Kim Namhye. You wrote about your house,and I think this is proper object to describe.This is because you might know your room better than any other person. So, you can describe it perfectly. Your visual descriptions are nice. It really describes specifically about your room.I can visualize your room easily while reading it. But I think it would be more better, if you used another sense of description. For example, smell of your room or sound of your room. But it was a good sense of place.
ReplyDeleteOver 15 years, I had lived in one place. I loved my house, even if it's small, our family lived together. In that house, there are three rooms, one bathroom, and dining room linked kitchen. For me, the best place was my room, of course. What I look through the window is a street and a church, also I can see beautiful sunset because my room faces west. When I open the window, I can feel fresh wind. My room was small but there are much furniture and small ornaments. There is a bed, a desk, and a piano, also there are three bookshelves. I decorated my room like a real girl place. The bed is rose-colored and the sheet is pink-colored. On the bed, there are some dolls and soft cushions being edged with white lace, they feel really soft and smell sweet. Other furniture is made of hardwood, so it looks like a room for little princess. Of course, even the wallpaper was pink-colored and brightened. This was my first room, and I spend half of my life in this place. So I can remind it whenever I want. If I can return before I move, I want to see my lovely place again.
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