My Life Until Now Is HAPPY!
I can express my life until now in one word 'happy'. The main reason why my life is happy is people around me. When I was born, my mom and dad who I met first in my life were delighted to see me. They devoted all their energies to bringing me up. It was lucky for me to meet them! Some years later, my lovely younger sister and brother were born in order. They were fond of me and I could learn taking care of someone faithfully. We are chummy sisters and brother! In my childhood, there were always good friends around me and I could get along with them. My school years, I met many great teachers who treated me familiarly and we are in a good relationship until now. My friends and teachers praised me for my effort heartily and encouraged me when I'm having a rough time. Now I am a university student. I can meet many different people like professors, classmates, seniors, juniors in school. One of them is my boyfriend. He makes me smile. When I'm with him I feel that I am loved. So I am very thankful and grateful that so many people around me make me a happy person.
It's interesting that you defined your life into a word. I think it's well described why your life was happy by having great families, friends, teachers and so on. Although, the writing seems to be general and needs more details. Otherwise, choice of vocabulary was nice especially use of several adjectives.
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What I like about this piece of writing is your positive point of view to the life. With such an affirmation, people can endure any harshness in any situation. You got a kind of weapon to live this troubled world.
Your main point seems to be the happiness in your life. One of wellsprings of the happiness is your family. Probably, your positive attitude of life came from your happy family containing parents, younger sister and brother.
This line, my friends and teachers encouraged me when I'm having a rough time, struck me as powerful, because this line show me your another advantage, good relationship among people.
In my opinion, it would make the biggest improvement in this piece of writing, if you say more episodes and details of your experience.
I would like to hear more about you. Your paragraph was very interesting. Thanks, happy girl.^^
My Life Until Now Is HAPPY!
ReplyDeleteI can express my life until now in one word 'happy'. The main reason why my life is happy is people around me. When I was born, my mom and dad who I met first in my life were delighted to see me. They devoted all their energies to bringing me up. It was lucky for me to meet them! Some years later, my lovely younger sister and brother were born in order. They were fond of me and I could learn taking care of someone faithfully. We are chummy sisters and brother! When my whole family posed for a group portrait, the photographer was envy of our sibling's good relationship, saying "You guys hit it off really well." In my childhood, there were always good friends around me and I could get along with them. We sometimes used to play at the playgroud or chum around with each other after school. My school years, I met many great teachers who treated me familiarly and we are in a good relationship until now. My friends and teachers praised me for my effort heartily and encouraged me when I'm having a rough time. When I lost out in the final round of a university, they cheered me up and offer words of consolation and encouragement. Now I am a university student. I can meet many different people like professors, classmates, seniors, juniors in school. One of them is my boyfriend. He makes me smile. When I'm with him I feel that I am loved. So I am very thankful and grateful that so many people around me make me a happy person.