| I have a cute one-piece dress which contains a happy memory. Its upper part is white and little bit boxy, and the lower skirt part is spriped and tight. I bought it last summer while I was traveling Singapore with my older sister. As you all know, Singapore is very hot and humid, so I needed to buy a light cloth; one night, on our way to dinner, my sister found a simple and cute dress on the roadshop and paid for it as a present. I was so pleasant to have the one-piece as my sister bought it as well as it was very adorable and unique. That is why in my Singapore traveling pictures, almost all of my clothes is the white and striped dress. So naturally, that one-piece reminds me of happy memories with my sister and I am looking forward summer to come when I can wear my adorable dress.
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Thursday, March 22, 2012
My Important Possession / Kyeong-eun Lee / Mon34
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I could easily understand that your writing is about the most meaningful possession you own, a dress. The appearance of dress is well described so that I can visualize in my head. Also you explained specific background how you got it from your sister in Singapore. However, I think there are some general terms such as "cute" and "adorable." If you had written more detailed words instead of them, the writing would have been more clear. Overall, it is well organized and I especially like the last conclusion sentence because it restates the main idea in a unique way.
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