My house is consisted of a living room, two bathrooms, a kitchen, three bedrooms. Of those places of my house I am going to descirbe my room. My room is not so big nor not so small. It has a study table, a bad, a mirror and a bookshelf. It also has some posters of my favourite singers on the wall. Except for this, my bedroom does not have many decorations. On my table, I have many stuff. It is very messy. Lately, I have been very busy so I could not clean up my table. It is a jumble. Classnotes and some printouts are all over the places. I really want to put them away into a garbage bin but I just cannot tell which one is the one that I should not throw away or not. On a bookshlef, I have several books. Most of them are Korean books but I also have some English books as well. I used to love reading book but recently, as I said, I been so busy and could not read it. Later on, I will continue to read the book calle 'Sophie's World'. My bed is very pluffy and it is the best place in my room. I try to keep it clean so it is a very cozy place. I not only sleep in my bed but also read books and play some games on my iphone. I spilled purfume on my bed pillow so it smells very sweet. Everytime I am tired, I think of my own bed.
This is YoungHoon Kim. What I liked about your writing is that you expressed personal feelings when you describe your room. It was somewhat intersting to read. But you need improvement in describing. I can see what you are talking about but I can't draw a complete picture in my head. Please try to include more details that make the writing more vivid. Anyway you did a good job!
ReplyDeleteMy house is consisted of a living room, two bathrooms, a kitchen, three bedrooms. Of those places of my house I am going to descirbe my room. My room is not so big nor not so small. It is an ordinary-sized bedroom. I think seven four people at most can play together in my bedroom. In my bedroom,it has a study table, a bad, a mirror and a bookshelf. It also has some posters of my favourite singers on the wall. Except for these, my bedroom does not have many decorations. However, let me continue to describe my room in more details. On my table, I have many stuffz. It is very messy. Lately, I have been very busy so I could not clean up my table. It is a jumble. Classnotes and some printouts are all over the places. There is a big file of papers. You can see some papers are in Spanish, some are in Korean and some are in English. It is because I major in two languages and also take Korean lessons! I really want to put them away into a garbage bin but I just cannot tell which one is the one that I should not throw away or not. On a bookshlef, I have several books. My bookshelf is not big. It is consisted of three columns. Most of books in there are Korean books but I also have some English books as well. I used to love reading book but recently, as I said, I been so busy and could not read it. Later on,if I can have leisure time, I will continue to read the book called 'Sophie's World'. My bed is very pluffy and it is the best place in my room. I have a pink bed sheet and a vivid pink pillow on the bed. I try to keep my bed clean so it is a very cozy place. I not only sleep in my bed but also read books and play some games on my iphone. I spilled some purfume on my bed pillow on purpose, so it smells very sweet. It smells like fresh fruit. Everytime I am tired, I think of my own bed.
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