<A good physician>
To be a good physician, what virtues should the physicians have? First, they might need expertise in their own field. Physician is a medical expert who has tremendous responsibility for patients' condition, life or death. Patients believe their doctors and throw themselves on doctors's mercy. And, physicians must live up to patients' expectations. If physicians not competent enough are not careful, they may harm patient's life. Second virtue is an ability that explains patients' symptoms and treatments easily to understand. Patients have a right to understand their conditions and efficient cure thoroughly. Most of them are not familiar with medical field, so they have no choice but to fully comply with doctor. Even doctors have perfect specialized knowledge, however they can' t give an explanation simply to patients. What is the use of talking? The last thing is 'modest attitude'. Some doctors are too conceit to ignore patients. They can't listen carefully to voices of patients. There may be chances that make a wrong diagnosis. They must pay particular attention not to make an error. If a physician meet these three qualifications, he/she can be a good physician.
Hello! This is Youna Lee. What I like about your writing is that it is well organized so I can catch your main points easily. I liked the sentence 'Patients believe their doctors and throw themselves on doctor's mercy' because it not only supports your point well but also it is quite impressive. However, I think if you wrote about your personal experiences or more powerful examples to support your points, it would be much better. But overall, I really enjoyed your writing. Thank you!
ReplyDeleteHello, your writing seems very well organized and strong as it contains three strong evidences to support your main topic: necessity to have expertise in their fields, ability to explain symptoms to patients fully, having the modest attitude. As you made some good word choices that enhanced your quality of writing even more. One thing I would do about this writing is to add your personal and actual experiences. If so, your writing would become stronger.
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