Today, I will talk about essential requirements of a genuine leader. As a political leader, first of all, he should be able to give a solution to current problems as well as fully understand each of areas that the government has to deal with. Of course, it is impossible that only one person handle every branch. So, in order to carry out country's affairs, support of many competent people is really needed. In other words, the person who have a eye to discern talented people is the suitable leader we can trust and support. Second, he must take charge of what he says and does. We have many experiences with the presidents who have so low memory capacity that they could not remember anything against themselves. We shouldn't repeat same mistake. We have to thoroughly verify candidates' past so as to decrease possible disaster. At last, to become the best leader, he should have political leadership. Although he has all the other abilities, he will not be able to conduct state affairs without political competence. He should sometimes be able to embrace his enemy as well as his enthusiastic admirers. If anyone who runs for next president election has all of these requirements, I will vote for him without hesitation.
Great writing! What I like about your writing is that it well describes some responsibilities that the president should have. The most three requirements are well organized in it. I was espeically impressed with the line that says "we shouldn't repeat same mistake." Your opinion towards the government is explained enough in the simple sentence. However, there are some grammatical mistakes, such as "the person who have~" and "one person handle~." The verbs should agree with the subjects. Overall, nice writing !
ReplyDeleteThank you, Jieun. I wrote this second draft thanks to your comment.
ReplyDeleteAnd I modified some gender mistakes. Women can be the president, so I changed some personal pronouns.
WHO deserves to be the PRESIDENT?
Today, I will talk about essential requirements of a genuine leader. As a political leader, first of all, he or she should be able to give a solution to current problems as well as fully understand each of areas that the government has to deal with. Of course, it is impossible that only one person handles every branch. So, in order to carry out country's affairs, support of many competent people is really needed. In other words, the person who has a eye to discern talented people is the suitable leader we can trust and support. Second, the leader must take charge of what he says and does. Unfortunately, we know many presidents who have so low memory capacity that they didn’t remember anything they did and said. We shouldn't repeat same mistake. We have to make a thorough investigation into candidates so as to decrease possible disaster. At last, to become the best leader, he or she should have political leadership. Although the leader has all the other abilities, he or she will not be able to conduct government without political competence. The genuine leader should sometimes be able to embrace enemies as well as enthusiastic admirers. If anyone who runs for next president election has all of these requirements, I will vote for him or her without hesitation.