When I was young, I had my own empire: my family. In that kingdom, I was a dictator, because I am an only child. So, in that time, I was an egoist, and I satisfied that. However, after I had entered an elementary school, the situation was entirely changed. Of course, first time, I acted like a princess. But as time went on, there was no one who wants to play with me. In that small, but organized society, I was just a girl like other people. Nobody wanted to do anything that I imposed. But I didn't change my personality a lot, and I stuck to my opinion. But when I was 14 years old, something happened to me, which changed my life completely. There was a big quarrel about my personality between me and my friends. They said they suppressed their anger for long time, and they couldn't do it anymore. I was very shocked. Because I thought they are my best friends. So, finally, I realized my serious problem of personality, and I tried to change it into a sociable one. Now, I have many friends and I have little problem caused of my personality. Also, after I succeeded it, I have very positive attitude. At last, I become a sociable and positive person.
Hi.I'm Oh You Jeong
ReplyDeleteI think your story is very unique.It's about your childhood memories but it is still related to present 'you'. I didn't have my imaginary friends when I was a kid so your story was a bit surprising to me. However, I couldn't find specific explanations about you in the writing. I think it would be much better if you had a very word that could describe yourself specifically.
Hello, I'm Song eun Ko.
ReplyDeleteI was intereting that you introduced yourself by showing changes of your personality. And you didn't forget and state what changed your nature and what picked you out in your 'empire'. It was great! However, your writing can be a better one if you added more and detailed emotions. It was nice to know about you. Thank you~!!
Hi. I'm Kim Nam Hye. Your writing was very comfortable to read, because you describe your personality with your very personal anecdotes. Especially I like nouns such as princess or egoist. They help us to understand your personality more easily. But there are some grammatical problems. Also, altough your anecdotes are specific and very personal , I think it would be better if you write anecdotes that can focus more on your personality , not on circumstances that you faced. But it was a good writing.
ReplyDeleteWhen I was young, I had my own empire: my family. In that kingdom, I was a dictator, because I am an only child. So, in that time, I was an egoist, and I satisfied that. However, after I had entered an elementary school, the situation was entirely changed. Of course, first time, I acted like a princess. But as time went on, there was no one who wants to play with me. I was very embarrassed. In that small, but organized society, I was just a girl like other people. Nobody wanted to do anything that I imposed. But I didn't change my personality a lot, and I stuck to my opinion. But when I was 14 years old, something happened to me, which changed my life completely. There was a big quarrel about my personality between me and my friends. They said they suppressed their anger for long time, and they couldn't do it anymore. I was very shocked. Because I thought they are my best friends. Also, I felt so humiliated. So, finally, I realized my serious problem of personality, and I tried to change it into a sociable one. The big problem is that I have my own world where the place is perfect for me and nobody is allowed to get inside. After I realized that, I broke the wall which is between my own world and the real world. Now, I have many friends and I have little problem caused of my personality. Also, after I succeeded it, I have very positive attitude. At last, I become a sociable and positive person. Change my self is very tough thing. But for a long time, now and forever, I keep trying to do it for me and my friedns, also for my family.
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