'Values that good physicians should have'
There are several values to be a good physician, but I think the most important two things are ability as a physician and love for patients. First of all, physicians have to be competent when treating patients. They can never be a good physician if they are lack of medical knowledge and have poor skills, even though they are absolutely diligent and nice to patients. The ability for each occupation is quite natural thing, however in case of physician is more significant because they handle people's health and often their life too. For example, I once had to go to the hospital because my tonsils were harshly swollen. The physician who treated me was really unfriendly and cynical, but I remembered him as a good doctor as he cured me well and I recovered fast. Secondly, physicians must love patients. Patients are the reason why they exist. Therefore its their duty to always concern about them and consider better ways how to face them. There are many physicians who have outstanding treatment skills. However, doctors who are remembered for a long time in our heart and memory are those who sincerely take care of us. Albert Schweitzer is the most representative man of this. Thus I definitely think a good physician is who has both great skill and powerful love for their patients.
Hi! I think your writing is quite clear. I could easily catch your point: a good physicial needs good ability and love for patients. Although I think you can imporve your paragraph by editing your example sentences. Since this week's assignment is to write an example paragraph, it would be better if you put more examples and details to it. Otherwise, it was very catchy writing and easy to understand.
ReplyDeleteHi, my name is Kyeong-eun Lee. I enjoyed your writing because it has two specific reasons about your think. What I liked most in your writing is "Patients are the reason why they exist," because some physicians seem to forget it in Korea. However, I do not know what "tonsils" are so it would be better if you explained what it is. But overally your writing was good. Thank you.
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ReplyDeleteThere are several values to be a good physician, but I think the most important two things are ability as a physician and love for patients. First of all, physicians have to be competent when treating patients. They can never be a good physician if they are lack of medical knowledge and have poor skills, even though they are absolutely diligent and nice to patients. The ability for each occupation is quite natural thing, however in case of physician is more significant because they handle people's health and often their life too. For example, I once had to go to the hospital because my tonsils (lymphatic tissue situated one on each side of the back of the mouth) were harshly swollen. The physician who treated me was really unfriendly and cynical, but I remembered him as a good doctor as he cured me well and I recovered fast. Secondly, physicians must love patients. Patients are the reason why they exist. Therefore its their duty to always concern about them and consider better ways how to face them. There are many physicians who have outstanding treatment skills. However, doctors who are remembered for a long time in our heart and memory are those who sincerely take care of us. Albert Schweitzer is the most representative man of this. He founded a hospital in Africa and devoted his life curing African natives. This couldn't be done if he would not love his patients. Also this is why he is remembered as a great physician. Thus I definitely think a good physician is who has both great skill and powerful love for their patients.